Posted by Anonymous

So today, the muse write in class was. . . interesting. I chose, as others did, Mayakovsky as their poet. I liked my writing so i figured i'll share it.
Where is She
Where is this girl,
I cannot find
she is the one
always on my mind

Her beauty is of fresh cut roses
in a bouquet for a valentine
where is she I do not know
but this knowledge I wish to be mine

She is not hidden in my heart,
but hidden in my eyes
I know she is out there in front of me
while my eyes tell me lies

The day that she comes around,
said day will be my best
the stars will shine as bright as the sun
but until that day, to find her is a test

When I close my eyes
she stands in front of me
I place her hand in mine
and this is how I want it to be

I can see her now
long hair flowing as the wind blow
nice soft lips ready for a kiss
and beautiful eyes that ever so slightly glow

This one is perfect
so beautiful can't you see
I struggle to find her in my own--
but when will she find me

Tell me what you think; any feedback is highly welcome as always

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1 comments

Francesca Mesiti  

I chose him as my favorite poet as well! His work is very interesting to study because of all his emotions that he incorporates in one literary piece. I think your poem sounds good it really flows well. You also used short stanzas which as a reader I liked because it makes not only makes the poem easier to read but it takes less time to read it as well. I noticed that you used a lot of descriptive words allowing the reader to picture what you were trying to desribe very clearly. Overall, I think this sounded really well.

February 23, 2012 at 8:36 PM

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