Posted by Tyler

I figured I would post one of my poems up here. Hoping for some feedback. Let me know if you hate it, like it, or if it stirs up some other random feelings inside of you. Merci.


Mountains raised beyond the sun

As the silver bullet left the gun

The barrels floated in the creek

As the meek gained courage and anger

No man could slander

The boat or the banter

The arguing townsmen

Who slew the enchanter

The desert lake was frozen over

With ice spreading onto the grass

The cold swept across

The land and so the larks did come to pass

No moss shew which way was north

For the compass was destroyed

The rabbit frolicked in the clay pits

As the stump became annoyed

The odd purple dove flew

Up and away

To leave the scene of the crime

As the stillness crept out from the sea

The arid air erased the tears

That poured out of the woman’s face

Her cry was heard

While the birds stirred

In the makings for something to eat

Some sweet treat for the winter to eat

For the bearded cloaked white devil

To slam down his throat and fill up on

Some poison concoction prepared

To corrupt december’s digestion

As the solstice-month munched

On the last leaves of fall

As the lark came back to make his call

As the snow enveloped it all

This entry was posted on Sunday, February 26, 2012 at 2/26/2012 11:07:00 PM . You can follow any responses to this entry through the comments feed .

1 comments

Wow I really loved this a lot!! You are a great writer!! I sometimes have difficulty with ending my poems at the right time and in a good way, but I think your ending was perfect. But all of it was wonderful! Word choice, rhyme scheme, length, the meaning, it was all really great. Well done.

March 4, 2012 at 7:36 PM

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