Like a bunch of other people have said in their posts, this is my first poetry class I've ever taken as well. I have always been interested in poetry because I think its a very beautiful form of writing. In middle school my English teacher encouraged us to be creative, and one of my poems ended up being published! However, in high school my teachers never made it a point to examine poetry, so I am really excited to learn all about it.
My favorite part of being in this class, even though it has only been three weeks is watching my writing evolve. As I look back on my first muse write it was very weak and made little sense, and now I am starting to use some fundamental elements of poetry in work, such as iambic pentameter, and meter. I have already started attempting to revise my poems for our portfolio project. One of the poems I have revised is below.
You say your
days are limited but I do not listen,
You cannot
leave this world without me,
The doctors
say your days are numbered,
However I
refuse to believe this bad news,
As I stare
at the pain on your face my head hurts.
Minutes
hours and days pass,
You do not
get better you remain ill,
I think
about your current state each night as I pray,
I never want
you to leave please forever stay,
I look back
on my time with you and you have transformed me into a new person,
You proved
to me people still could be true.
You kiss me
one last time,
Whispering
I’ll always be with you,
As I glare
into your eyes,
The blue
color of them becomes forever embedded in my mind.
Your eyes
close and I scream for the doctor,
She tells me
she hates to the bearer of the bad news but your gone,
I promise
myself I will help find a cure for cancer,
I dream of
the day we meet again.
I thank God
for blessing me with you,
You were an
angel,
I will never
let you go,
Never.
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